下面是他写的一篇英文短文,请各位帮忙改错,顺便评价一下他的英文水平.(不知所云,勉强可读,四级上下,六级高手
)另外,下文中"A"指一家公司名．
全文如下：
About A's Advantages and Disadvantages
Advantages:
1. A owns the world class customers. These customer's requirements (i.e. quality, service, production, delivery) continually facilitate A taking new technique, devices and methods to provide the best connectors and services to achieve customer satisfactions.
2. A has 27 connector production lines which have amount of convenient inspection equipments (e.g. CCD tester, mistake-proofing fixture etc.
These equipments can ensure the quality of products meet the customer's specifications and reduce the labor cost.3. A has excellent training system. The operators, engineers, management must be qualified prior to normal working at their location. All members must be trained according to " yearly training plan' to evaluate their knowledge, skills etc．
4. A has excellent Quality Management System. There are many procedures and introductions to assist operators to monitor the products and processes. QA Department has A large laboratory, it can do some reliability test, environment test, electrical testing and mechanical testing refer to international standards and industry standards. A had been certificated by BSI and SGS with ISO 9001, ISO14001, TS16949.
Disadvantages:
1. A is an OEM company, it has no own brand.
2. Some of major materials (e.g. contact, housing, electronic component etc) come from abroad, A can't produce itself. Therefore, the delivery time and the quality of materials sometimes affect A's normal production.
3. At phase of new products design, some of analysis tools (e.g. Cpk, FMEA, DOE, QFD) can't be applied by engineers.
[ 本帖最后由 jule12 于 2008-10-7 12:57 编辑 ]
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djsh821 (2008-10-07 13:18:14)
398534378 (2008-10-07 13:53:51)
398534378 (2008-10-07 13:59:38)
A公司是个OEM工厂，没有自己的品牌。
主要原材料（如连接器、外壳、电子元器件等）都是国外采购，A公司不能自己生产出来，因此交期和原材料质量有时会影响到A的正常生产。
在新品设计阶段，一些分析工具（如CPk、QFD、DOE、FMEA）不能被工程师应用。
artemis06 (2008-10-07 14:01:46)
语法错误不重要，只要能让人看明白又不会产生歧义就可以了．
感觉一般四级水平还写不出这样的文章哩．
rqb1970 (2008-10-07 14:08:18)
398534378 (2008-10-07 14:12:49)
jule12 (2008-10-07 20:23:53)
QUOTE:
---------老杜是从F公司出来的,应有两刷子吧!太自谦的说.jule12 (2008-10-07 20:30:52)
QUOTE:
--------语法有问题的说!请Amy指点一二．jule12 (2008-10-07 20:32:22)
QUOTE:
－－－－－－－－你嘴巴很甜的说！billlovet (2008-10-07 21:19:43)
为啥要用WHICH修饰?从这个句子结构来看WHICH应该是PRODUCTION LINES..但从意思上是说A公司拥有这些检测设备,不是生产线拥有这些检测设备..应该用AND HAVE
These equipments can ensure the quality of products meet the customer's specifications and reduce the labor cost.
前面应加through...通过这些设备,而不是这些检测设备本身能够
不知道对不对..呵呵..
如果真的能写出这些英语应该超过6级了,,,,我就写不出啦.服了..
jule12 (2008-10-07 21:30:48)
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－－－－－－货真价实的中专生写出来的！shellyjiang (2008-10-08 09:39:13)
1.优势的第2项，前面有位朋友提到过,which，have amount of,及这句话末的equipments。如果我翻译这句话的话，我会这样翻：in which a large number of ...equipments are available.因为后面紧接着的这句开头他也是用的equipments，为避免两个挨着感觉重复。我把他用到前面了。当然，他那种翻译法也行，只不过，要提醒的是,amount of后面只能跟不可数名词哟，但是equipment是可数的，所以要把这个修饰数量的短语改掉。
2.优势的第3项，第一句。少个冠词an. an excellent system. 第二句最后的at their location，是说在他们各自的岗位上吗还是真正的在他们的地方？如果是前者，那是否应该是at their position? 最后一句的“yearly training plan”，应该也是对的哈，不过annual training plan是否更好呢？嘻嘻。后面的knowledge, skills etc.标点错误啦。该是“knowledge and skills,etc.” 只有两个名词，用and连接，而非直接加逗号哈，etc前面要加个逗号（好像是逗号，不敢确认啦
3.优势第4项，第一句，与上面的一样，少个冠词an.第二句to monitor,前面已经有assist sb to do sth了，后面这儿用in monitoring或许更好，表示在哪方面，同时也避免了两个to.第三句，a large lab, it can...，那儿出现的几个test是否要用复数哟？个人认为，用 in which some ..tests can be performed.因为lab是不会自己do tests的。紧接着后面的refer to该是referring to吧？最后一句had been certified 该是has been吧？A公司现在应该都还是取得了那些证书的撒？用had been 说明只是过去，现在已经不拥有那些证书了。
4.弱项里面第2项，A cant produce itself,在itself前加个by. 第3项第一句， at 后是否该加个the?
以上仅为个人意见，如有任何不当之处，请各位指教，但是请别攻击我哈。谢谢！
shellyjiang (2008-10-08 09:45:12)
jule12 (2008-10-08 12:32:35)
QUOTE:
----------呵呵,多谢支持.fuqide (2008-10-09 18:01:19)
fuqide (2008-10-09 18:11:26)
我认为用：A have many the world class customers比较好一点
Some of major materials (e.g. contact, housing, electronic component etc) come from abroad, A can't produce itself
这句应该是这样吧， A couldn't produce some of the major raw materials and components( such as contact, housing, electronic component etc) by itself and need buy them from abroad.
yaozg (2008-10-10 17:12:39)
emily-lee (2008-10-11 20:32:46)
洛客 (2008-10-30 04:19:54)
Strengths:
1. “A” has customers around the world, and many of them are Fortune 500 companies. These customers’ stringent requirements in quality, service, production, delivery, etc. have helped the company develop new technologies, methods and equipments to deliver the best connectors and services to its cumstomers.
2. “A” has 27 connector production lines, and all are well-equipped with modern inspection and testing devices such as CCD tester, mistake-proofing fixture, etc. to ensure product quality at the lowest possible cost.
3. “A” has installed an excellent training program. It is mandatory that all employees, managers included, must go through required trainings prior to their assignments. And, they all have to follow their personal "yearly training/evaluation plan” during performance evaluation.
4. “A” has implemented an excellent Quality Management System. Many processes and procedures have been developed to assist operators to monitor and control. On the other hand, QA Department has established a large and well-equipped laboratory to conduct tests for the products to meet international and industrial standards. “A” has been certificated by BSI and SGS for being in compliance with ISO 9001, ISO14001 and TS16949.
Weaknesses:
1. “A” is an OEM company and does not own its name brand.
2. Some of its major suppliers are located overseas. Therefore, delivery time and quality issues sometimes affect A's normal production.
3. A’s engineers are not familiar with the use of analysis tools like Cpk, FMEA, DOE, and QFD.
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